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Love, Lies, and Laughter
Sat Sep 24, 2011, 03:49 PM
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RE: Love, Lies, and Laughter
(Mon Sep 19, 2011 06:50 AM)Canis Enigmas Wrote:  Damn, really struggling to find the time to read through this long storiesTongue

Only 2/3 through and I like the story ideas you have. They are "snapshots" and the characters/storylines are not related to one another, right?

Critiques: Well, the stories feel somewhat disconnected from the reader :/
Its rather like a summarized view from a third person's view and lacks the more emotional connection direct from storyteller to audience. I believe you've gotten the scene and plot down pretty solid, you just need to improve in the method and style of delivery Winking

thanx for the critique.... its much appreciated... Big smile

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Love, Lies, and Laughter - Theshadows64 - Mon Sep 05, 2011, 11:13 AM
RE: Love, Lies, and Laughter - Canis Enigmas - Mon Sep 19, 2011, 06:50 AM
RE: Love, Lies, and Laughter - Theshadows64 - Sat Sep 24, 2011 03:49 PM
RE: Love, Lies, and Laughter - ickda - Wed Apr 25, 2012, 03:24 PM

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